Lesson 8

We will review feedback on the Section Diagnostic. We will use the feedback to make revisions to our work.

Lesson Goals

Can I make effective changes to my work based on feedback about the Section Diagnostic Checklist?

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Activity 1: Read – Discuss – Write

We will review the feedback for our previous Section Diagnostic.

Step 1

Reread your Section Diagnostic response and the teacher comments and evaluations you received.

Step 2

Form writing groups or peer-review pairs. If you are acting as a peer tutor, discuss what your peer might need assistance with. Use the questions in the Section 1 Diagnostic Peer Review Questions to guide your feedback and your own reflection.

Step 3

Use your partner’s feedback and your own reflection to make revisions to your response.

Activity 2: Read – Discuss – Write

We will reread a selected excerpt from one of the texts we have read to analyze the author’s use of language.

Step 1

Follow your teacher’s direction regarding grouping, materials, and which mentor sentences you will analyze. Use the Working with Mentor Sentences Tool to work through the following steps for each mentor sentence.

Step 2

Read the sentence aloud. Unpack any unfamiliar vocabulary using your vocabulary strategies. Then, determine what the sentence is saying, and paraphrase the sentence to convey its meaning based on your initial understanding.

Step 3

Deconstruct the whole into parts. Split the sentence up into parts as directed by your teacher; sometimes your teacher will give you the parts, and sometimes you will have to split the sentence on your own. Complete the following for each part:

Determine the parts of speech and function.
Note other observations about the part, such as examples of effective diction or changes in verb tense or point of view.

Step 4

Follow along as your teacher reviews the relevant grammatical terms and concepts of specific phrases and clauses, punctuation, syntax, mood, and tone.

Step 5

Analyze the concepts. Review, discuss, and revise your deconstruction notes. Then, respond to the following questions:

Which parts make up the main clause? The main clause is the main subject and predicate that expresses the central idea of the sentence. Write down the sentence, underlining the main clause.
How do the other parts of the sentence (e.g., phrases, clauses, modifiers) enhance the main clause?
How could you restructure this sentence so that it relays the same message to the reader? What is the impact of the different structures on your understanding?
What revisions need to be made to your initial paraphrasing now that you have increased your understanding of the sentence?

Step 6

Analyze mood, tone, and meaning. Discuss the following questions:

What mood does the author create in this sentence? How is this mood created?
What tone is conveyed by the author in this sentence? How is that tone conveyed?
What does this sentence contribute to the author’s ideas in the text? How does it expand your understanding of the text or author?

Step 7

Follow your teacher’s directions about choosing one or two mentor sentences to mimic. Use your deconstruction analysis of your chosen sentences to write your own, mimicking what the author does in terms of structure, style, grammar, and punctuation. The specific content of your sentences is your choice. Be prepared to share your sentences with your peers.

Activity 3: Write

We will close out this lesson by answering questions individually.

In your Learning Log, respond to the following questions individually.

In what ways did you assist your fellow students in this lesson? Be specific.
How was the peer review process helpful?
How might the peer review process have been difficult?
What was your biggest challenge with revising your response to the Section 1 Diagnostic?
What was your biggest success with revising your response to the Section 1 Diagnostic?